An Unorganized Take On Obama’s New Health Care Law

Hey everyone,

I came across this article in the NY Times regarding Obama’s new health care law and its journey through the Supreme Court rulings (http://www.nytimes.com/2012/04/03/us/politics/obama-says-hes-confident-health-care-law-will-stand.html?ref=policy).

Though the topic of the piece is very intriguing and newsy, I wouldn’t call it a well-organized story. In fact, I had a difficult time pinpointing which paragraph was the nut graph. Later in the story, adding to my confusion, a completely unrelated topic was brought up, military aid in Mexico, and then never concluded on or tied into the rest of the story.

After reading the story, what do you think? Is the nut graph difficult to identify? Was the story clearly outlined? Is the piece unorganized and off-topic at times?

 

Looking forward to your responses,

Emily Wilhelm

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About emilywilhelm

I am a Junior at the University of Michigan- Ann Arbor majoring in Art & Design and minoring in Film.

4 Responses to “An Unorganized Take On Obama’s New Health Care Law”

  1. I would completely agree with you here, this is a very oddly organized article. The information about Mexico and South Korea do not seem related at all to the topic of health care, giving the impression that the writer didn’t have a clear vision for his story. In addition, the nut graph is not very evident, and it’s difficult to say what it would include considering the content of the article. If it could in someway connect the topics, I think it would do a good job in making the article less awkward and giving it some structure. I think in this case the editor might have failed to take out the unnecessary content, or perhaps did too much trimming, confusing the point of the article.

    Alex McCoy

  2. It looks to me like the main point of this article is that President Obama gave a press conference, so the article is a mishmash of things he said at the conference and background information about all the topics he covered. If that’s the case, then the nut graph is “in his first public comments since….”, and there’s another nutty sentence buried in the body of the piece explaining that the health care topic “overshadowed a news conference that touched on” Mexican drug violence and other topics.

    However, if the press conference is indeed the unifying subject of the piece, then the author should have included some imagery of the conference itself. He also should have constructed the health care part of the article as a cohesive unit and moved the discussion of Mexico to the end of the piece.

    Dafna

  3. You said it, this is strange. I agree with Dafna, the overarching theme is that a press conference occurred and that they are reporting the things that took place in the conference. However, that was not clearly expressed in any lede or nut graph. Why is he holding a press conference? What are the topics that are vital enough to be disucussed? As we always say in class, WHY NOW? I can understand his opening heading straight into hard hitting news, but without explaining that he will be transitioning topics midway and discussing the whole press conference the article loses it’s focus.

    Jessica

  4. I disagree with you on some of your points. I thought the article was pretty cohesive and did a good job of explaining the issue and its controversy in the lead, especially with the subsequent hyper linking. I also thought the nutgraf was pretty clear and obvious. The nutgraf does not always convey statistics and many facts but explains why the reader should care. This nutgraf explained the topic, Obama’s optimism about the law, and set the article in motion. However, I did agree with you that the other country’s seemed random and out of their element. The two topics separately were interesting but they failed to connect to each other. I would recommend the writer, convey these two ideas in shorter blogs instead or find a way to better connect them.

    -Taylor Wizner

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